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The rooms silence is worse than a thousand boos
People tell me I've won, yet the signs say I lose
Surronded by people who will forget me after all is said and done
The majority of this life will be a party of one

Hideous beasts surface, their misdeeds forgotten
The fables they spin will forever smell rotten
Surpressing rage as I'm told to forgive
Never, I say, as long as I live

Some may call me pessimistic, others may call me a cynic
I may even hold more rage than an internet critic
I dismiss these labels, although they aren't far from being true
I prefer passionate and realistic, but there's no difference between the two

I'll run from my problems, I'll admit that
Hell, I can go berserk from the drop of a hat
My mind is a rather messed-up place,
However I hide my conflict behind this mask I call a face

I've seen childhood friends come, and then go
I've seen traitors claiming to be as pure as fresh snow
Twice I've came close to meeting Death
Twice I've slipped through his fingers, refusing to breath my last breath

Dark this may seem, but where there is shadow, there is light.
And as long as there is light, rest assured I will fight.
So to those who think they can stop me,
I'd like to see you end my pure insanity
Wind me up, piss me off, put a pen in my hand, and you get this

And yes, all of this is damn true
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tomjhyde Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
I'm a writer, not a poet, so I have no room to critique, but I will give my thoughts.

I've read a lot of "angsty, emo" poetry on dA. And I'm really tired of it. And you'll be happy to know that this isn't anywhere near the same category. It comes across as far more honest than those other folks.

Because in the end, you show that you haven't given up and you haven't surrendered. And in that lies your strength. Embrace your insanity, my friend. Because it can be your greatest strength when the world threatens to burn around you.

Well done.
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Bahamut625 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009
Thanks, man - I was hoping it didn't come of as a whiny emo bitch session
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tomjhyde Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2010
Definitely not!

(Reply from the PAST! :icondocbrownplz: )
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daracaex Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009   Photographer
Wow. It'd suck if nobody posted down here, after that first line. ;)

Nice poem Toao. I'd critique, but while I like poetry, I don't know it too well… I'm just reading it over and over to figure out where it came from.
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